my eyes fall on an old man taking hands of his beloved wife,just watching them walking side by side,I felt joy seeing such kind of love that’s still growing ,as time passes by,becomes more deeper&true,watching slowly every step they make till settling at sea shore,away from real life,children& grandchildren , trying to continue the picnic they started with sea longtime ago.
“I found myself wishing that we`d be like these true hearts who kept their love&carried such endless moments alive inside as long as they can,never faded away”
continuing my walk,suddenly,a laugh stopped me,a 3 years old child running with his dad,the mom encouraging her baby to continue running,just watching this pure laugh and realizing how much a simple thing would give a complete joy to such angel that he will carry deep inside forever and be one of his endless memories that when getting old,recall such memo to wash away a recent sorrow that would appear on his way.
for a while i didnt go back to my mind`s bubble as waves of sea were calling me to stay with thee,there just there,found myself recalling back my memories& whispers,felt you were around although you`re on another shore ,we still didnt meet but sea was trying to tell me about your whispers too that oneday we will meet gathering ours all, sitting on that rock,listening to these waves&continuing such picnic together.
Continuing along with my walk,my eyes fall on 2 lovers crossing street towards sea,holding hands,in the middle of the road he changed his position facing car`s direction,watching carefully traffic catching the moment to cross safely by his beloved to other side,this simple move really touched me,it carries alot within”safe&shelter&real love and care
” i passed slowly by them and wished them to always carry such kind of love"
this simple move showed me that true love is to care about your one without thinking, just what you carry for your one deep inside teaches you how to say i love you through a simple move,simple smile,simple glance.
At this moment i found myself can`t walk anymore,i smiled to sea,closed my eyes and went in a picnic with the waves of the sea again and started to sing my soul`s song.....
"I started to sing my soul's song." I've always believed that there is a song in all our hearts.. our souls.. dying to be heard and put into words.. Radwa, this was absolutely beautiful.. As I was reading this, a sense of calmness came over me and I found that so comforting. Thank you Radwa for sharing your story with us all!! I hope other's will take as much comfort in reading this as I did. :)
ReplyDeleteoh Crystal,i dont know what to say,you`ve made my day,im really so happy that you liked it this much,you know this one is one of my favorite ever,i wrote so many years ago and i kept with me,it was almost 900 words as my eyes saw many scenes,im glad i shared my favorite parts,as Danise said when you start writing you never stop :)
DeleteThanks Crystal for everything my dear friend
How lovely, so emotional, packed with feelings. I love the way you describe other people's love while missing your own love.
ReplyDeleteSally:) thanks alot,im glad you liked it :)
Deleteyour story is great one and loved the attached photos as well
nice that we all keep enlarging such bond
regards :)
Dear Radwa,
ReplyDeleteEver since Nancy posted exemples of different points of view I have been thinking about how POV creates atmosphere in a text. Here you seem to let your protagonist speak to her beloved as if she were writing an letter.
Or this is a kind of stream of conscienousness; her thoughts while she takes her walk.
Very nice.
Best wishes,
Anna
RFW No.43 - 'Romantic Picnic'
Dear Anna :),
Deleteim glad that you liked it,you know actually so many times i do this,having conversation inside of me and trying to see things in another way than it seems in reality,
everyday when coming back from work,i love to notice faces of ppl and their reactions,this make the discussion opened between me and me :)
thanks alot and my sincere regards to you dear Anna
Dear Radwa,
DeleteI'm back for a second read. I think it is a very good thing to write down what you think about when you are taking a walk. Some of my best ideas come to me when I'm walking or doing dishes and do not have access to pen and paper!
I hope you will write a story for the next challenge "I should have kissed you".
Best wishes & hugs,
Anna
xoxo
yeah ideas come while we doing other plans,but i love it when its done that way :)i feel it special,
Deletereally thanks alot for such support that you gave me,and wish i can for the next challenge :)
so nice meeting You Anna and meeting all RFWs :)
kisses and hugs to you as well my friend
ahh and thanks for the follow :)
DeleteI love the introspective view of others here. very nice
ReplyDeleteDear Heather,thanks for such precious opinion of yours :),i do appreciate
DeleteDear Heather,may i know why you didnt join us this challenge?wish you are fine and everything is ok :)
DeleteHi,
ReplyDeleteBeautiful piece of prose depicting the essence of love passing between others, while own love a distant heart-felt memory, yet peace and oneness gained along with song of the sea.
best
F
Thanks dear Francine,
Deleteyou opinion about my writing always make me feel better,
i appreciate such support
best regards
Radwa
Hi Radwa
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your story and loved how you played the sea as a song that brings lovers together. I also applaud your ability to write in English. If I tried to write in another language it would be gibberish.
Nancy
Hi Nancy :)
DeleteThank You so much,im glad that you liked it,you know sea is so close to me thats why i always get attached to everything related to it,
well my mother language is Arabic,but i was raised in a nuns` school and used to be taught poetry since preparatory and i used to get attached to Charles dickens and Shakespeare,i loved their descriptions,and since then i started to write but never shared till few years ago and was afraid as i was feeling amateur to share but believe me,since the day i knew Andy and Crystal and Elen and thanks for Andy who made me knew RFW ,and started to know all of you,believe me i have been supported in a tremendous way that i wish i can get better ,thank you so much for such support and for the follow :)
nice to meet you Nancy and glad that we be in touch
At this moment i found myself can`t walk anymore,i smiled to sea,closed my eyes and went in a picnic with the waves of the sea again and started to sing my soul`s song.....
ReplyDeleteDear Radwa. Beautiful you wrote and the end fabolous, I liked and I enjoyed it. Kiss Elen
my sweet Elena :)))))
Deleteglad that you liked it Elen,my dear friend
You are always there supporting me,thanks my friend ,kisses for You and a rose :)
You capture the romance well. Nicely done, Radwa.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Adura,glad that you liked it :)
DeleteDear Radwa,
ReplyDeleteYour post is filled with soooooo much tenderness. I love this kind of work when my emotions can be touched. I hope you will return again to share your humble talent with us. Great job my friend!!
Dear Andy,my friend and supporter and teacher :)
Deleteim speechless ,i cant thank you enough for all you doing to me,you showed me this awesome group and such wonderful people and you keep encouraging me to continue,you always making my days my Friend
Radwa, it's wonderful having you writing for RFW this week. What a touching set of scenes. I just came back from a walk beside/in 'my beloved sea' and your entry prolonged the blessing that such a walk is. You see so many tender scenes. I loved the man guiding his beloved across the street. That says so much. 'The waters of the sea started to sing my soul's song.' What a beautiful conclusion.
ReplyDeleteDon't forget to come back to RFW if you'd like to vote for your favourite entry this week. Go with your gut. Really should be someone who kept to the word limit and has a romantic element! Poll will go up Monday AEST.
Thanks for entering! We made our 20 goal!
DeniseDon't forget to come back to RFW if you'd like to vote for your favourite entry this week. Go with your gut. Really should be someone who kept to the word limit and has a romantic element! Poll will go up Monday AEST.
Thanks for entering! We made our 20 goal!
Denise
Denise,im really glad that you liked it and felt it in such nice way,thank you so much,i loved such scene too as i felt it simple yet carrying within so much feelings and care.
DeleteI will do my best to not forget :),it would be my pleasure to vote although it would be hard decision as all entries are special and everyone showed part of the picnic crystal,
Thanks for your kind follow to me :)
im glad we reached the 20,this is amazing
Very moving, back for a second read.
ReplyDeleteThanks alot Nilanjana,i do appreciate it
DeleteJaaaaaaaa I founf it dear friend. I am always in a hurry running instead to look better.. ha ha ha nice friend , nice writer. kiss Elen
ReplyDeleteits ok my sweet friend,i do understand,im glad that you did :D
Deleteim really happy and smiling
kisses to you
Excuse me .. the word found I type wrong . Kiss Elen
ReplyDeleteits ok,you welcome anytime dear
DeleteSuch a touching collection of scenes Radwa in a beautiful setting.
ReplyDeleteim really happy that you liked it,thanks for your encouragement dear Madeleine :)
DeletePeople watching can be as soothing as watching the waves flow. Loved all the different emotions. Thanks for participating this week Radwa.
ReplyDelete........dhole
Thank You Donna,im so glad iam back,reading all such awesome entries,all are special :)
DeleteWonderful images from a observant walk on the beach... I do it often and it's a wonderful source for writing inspiration.
ReplyDeleteThanks alot Michel,nice meeting you and glad you liked it
DeleteI applogise as i cant have a lab for these days so checking from mob is little bit hard so accept plz mq applogy for ma late reply
This didn't feel like a picnic, but rather a long, observant, nostalgic walk. Very evocative.
ReplyDeleteThanks scherazade
DeleteI applogise as i cant have a lab for these days so checking from mob is little bit hard so accept plz mq applogy for ma late reply
Lots of scenes here and interaction between people in relationships. Lots of food for thought for the writer.
ReplyDeleteThanks alot J.L glad you liked it
ReplyDeleteI applogise as i cant have a lab for these days so checking from mob is little bit hard so accept plz mq applogy for ma late reply
So nice meeting you